This is much better but your previous comment was awful. It read like a LLM alone wrote it.
That being said I can’t tell you why specifically it reads like that. I’m forwarding it to my friend who is a English professor to find out. If English is your second language then just keep at it and please don’t take the criticism here personally.
(Most) Third party voters are like cicadas. They spend the majority of their lives immature and underground. Every 4 years they swarm and die quickly to apathy and despair.
Just like cicadas, third party voters will be heavily affected by climate change.